Not every one can be a gem!

Here's a really pretty awful sketch. I did it, liked the initial idea, but the sketch required a lot of fixing in the computer. Plus I drew a new head on a completely different piece of paper, and figured I'd Gump that in later, with mixed results
There are elements of the original I liked, and wanted to keep, but the way the chest and shoulders were spaced looked really wonky, basically this pic needs to be redrawn with this as a reference for what I liked, and a warning about what I didn't like!
Let this be a warning to you, if it doesn't work in the original drawing, chances are it'll need either a lot of work to fix it, or it gets the needle, and goes away.